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(Contains: sexual themes)
They don’t make reruns like they used to
I realize after the fourth bottle
After the first microwave dinner
Since I woke up on the couch
Five and a half hours ago

I’ve been counting in episodes
Of The Antiques Roadshow
Thirty-four minute runtimes
That run slower every second
An old woman has a piano
Worth four thousand dollars and

I doze off on my elbows
Before the elevator music starts
And wake up in the same room
That smells like something died here
Crusty eyes focus on a VCR
Glowing twelve o’clock
Noon or midnight? I ask out loud
Like some sort of weirdo

Now the old woman’s gone, thank God
I wish this television got pay-per-view
I wonder if that piano was really
Worth four thousand dollars

I don’t know how I found the courage
To press that button for the third time today
The other line clicking to voice mail
The microwave beeping four times
Every minute on the minute

They don’t make couches like they used to
Broken recliners and shabby upholstery
That barely hold up for thirteen years
But not as long as some piano
Worth four hundred dollars

And it’s twelve o’clock again
And I’m wondering
If you’re ever coming home.
Written for class. No particular assignment. I was just playing with the "o" sound and letting that guide me from line to line.

Revised - 4/11/13
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Given 2013-01-25
Down the Drain by ~Vynlorin takes the ordinary and writes it in an extraordinary fashion. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Ilovepitbulls123 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Artist
0.o
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usaginu Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
beautiful! c
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usaginu Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
c:*
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Craazhy Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
I find the "o" thing fascinating. I've been writing all my life, albeit it has only so far lasted two decades, and I'm sure I could never pull that off while the poem remained coherent.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student General Artist
I like it. It totally paints a scene that I can see!
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student General Artist
This is beautiful!
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keidream Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Congratulations on the DD! I like the twist at the end.
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
I really like how you did this, letting the o sound guide you. :nod:
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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WolfxButterfly Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Writer
Fantastic. :heart: Keep up the wonderful work!
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